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She writes..... erases.
She types..... backspaces

Words don't come like they used to
Litterature is a language she once spoke fluently.
And now she has forgotten,
Forgotten the freedom and the beauty
In which she used to find at the tip of a pencil.
Forgotten the pride she acheived after each poem.
Words were like open doors, letting the pain free.
Now it's only bottled up, tangled in a huge knot.
It's not like she hasn't tried opening the bottle.
She has, many times in fact.
Failing to write a single word.
She starts with a blank page and gives up with a blank page.
Soon enough it will flow out like a waterfall
And it will hit her hard and fast. Throwing her to the ground
Her paper will be drowning with words.
Not the beautiful ones that could sing someone to sleep
No. Words like screams that could wake the dead.
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true words are fickle and taunt us. always just out of our reach until we lose our selves in either hatred rage or sorrow then they flood in like water behind a dam pushing us past are breaking point and leaving only destruction in our weak.

This poem is an excellent example of the struggle of what we writers struggle with on a day to day basis. MissLaurelle has proven herself as a promising young writer. Not only has she the heart to write but she also has the much desired talent.

I look forward to more of her writings in the future:iconso-awesomeplz:
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000SkyArrow000 Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I like the way you did that...that kind of feeling you show in your poetries I just love to read in poems and other literatures..

The way you described the empty feeling ...when someone just lost the ability to write....is so perfect.....and words really are like doors ...letting the pain free and all others feelings that we keep inside us...and of course much more we live...more pain we have inside us....

keep the good work...
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MissLaurelle Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2013  Professional Artist
thank you very much :D I appreciate it a lot!
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000SkyArrow000 Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You are very welcome....it's always a pleasure read your awesome poetries....^^
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grg123wntn Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This one speaks to me so much right now cause i am having so much difficulty getting my thoughts out and finding the release i normally do when i write. you are making my night tonight!
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SixstringMatt Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2012
I deeply admire the depth of honesty in this one, Miss Laurelle :) And I understand. I can go weeks, months without writing something new. Sometimes because the ideas aren't there and complete, sometimes because I just don't like what I have to say. But if it's in the heart to be put out to the world, I will. Just because it's unpleasant to write doesn't make it any less valuable. And in a lot of cases, when I'm hurting or angry, or when it's hard to get out what I'm feeling / going through... those are the times when I NEED to do it most, and when I have felt most satisfaction when I finally did. Even words like screams that could wake the dead, are sometimes exactly what needs to be said :hug: - Matt
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MissLaurelle Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2012  Professional Artist
thanks!
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RomeoDesCerises Featured By Owner May 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Wow, love it. Like your other one, it has a way about it that I'm just noticing, but I can't put my finger on it. If I had any grander word than, "talent", I would use it, or if I could describe the smooth sort of flow in a word, I'd try that too. I really think I could learn something from your writing.
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MissLaurelle Featured By Owner May 2, 2012  Professional Artist
you are so kind, thanks!
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SculptorOfDreams Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2012  Student Writer
This poem has lots of truth to it for us writers, be it poetry or prose. Excellent job! :thumbsup:
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MissLaurelle Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2012  Professional Artist
thank you!
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